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Reviewer: rory Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 02-19-07 - 02:21 am Title: The finalle

hell yeah you should post them!

Reviewer: rory Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 02-19-07 - 02:09 am Title: Ch.5

this don't suck! I like it! (just keep in mind I can go full out loco!!!)

Reviewer: plwas Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 09-06-04 - 01:33 am Title: The finalle

wow this shit sucked

Reviewer: ortny Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 12-18-03 - 06:59 pm Title: The finalle

that suckded like a two-cent hoe-hard.

Reviewer: Gryffindor_Lioness_Nesha Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 10-12-03 - 03:15 pm Title: The News

Hey you, I know you are asking isn't it a bit late for reviews on this story? Well maybe it is, but I recently read it again and I saw that it was really great, oh and you better continue and post this sequels you talk about , if not I don't know what I will do, so you better. Great story, you made me cry. bye

Reviewer: felicia Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09-09-03 - 10:07 am Title: The finalle

hi. enjoy reading your story i hope there a ending. dont leave us hanging.

Reviewer: Pari Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09-05-03 - 11:57 am Title: The News

The word is Constructive critism, constructive being the opt word:) I agree that the story had some grammar no-no, but go read my fics, or any other fic here and you will find the same. I personally never get a beta reader, and there are some errors, but it's still readble and enoyable, I hope:) The point is this author is putting his or her work out here, possibly their first fic, and there's no need to scare them off with sarcastic comments, it's not helpful guys. Which just made me think of a new rule here, no 'Flaming'. Why not offer or suggest a beta reader:) I liked the story and it's obvious to me that this is a young new writer. And I'd like to offer to the author my help, I'll be happy to read over your fics and help you out before you post it. Please don't let anyone's comments discourage you from writing, Believe me I used to get flamed alot, not everyone will like what you write or how you write, but what I did was use what others said to write better. Granted it may not always be what you want to hear, but even 'flames' can be helpful:) My email is parisian@spikeluver.com (Or you can just click my name and send me a 'comment'). I meant what I said I'd be happy to beta and help you out:) Pari

Reviewer: mellisa Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09-05-03 - 01:52 am Title: The News

it was good

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Date: 09-04-03 - 08:50 am Title: The News

Reviewer: cheaza Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09-04-03 - 08:49 am Title: The Rescue

okay this sentence inlike the second chapter is SO bad-- pls check your grammar or get a beta reader, cuz alot of youre story seems immature and poorly written ""OK," Storm said as the door to the Blackbird opened and she flew out and everyone watched her as her eyes turned a milky white and a tornado formed and it hit the water right away and a very large crystal came out of the water and Storm controlled the winds to bring her into the Bird and then she became dizzy and fainted and then fell into the water and then Logan saw what happened and then he dove in after her and grabbed her quickly and brought her head above water so she wouldn't drown." RUN ON SENTENCE!!

Reviewer: Nesha Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09-03-03 - 02:45 am Title: The Rescue

great story, although I think that you may be rushing a little. It has a great plot, and I am sure Ororo is pregnant, I hope their marriage will last.

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