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Reviewer: AngelAloft Signed [Report This]
Date: 08-19-12 - 04:04 am Title: Ch4- truth

The premise of this story is very good and it is well written. I just can't get into the wording of some of Logans conversations. I have a hard time picturing him talking that way, but what do I know this is your story and I just enjoyed reading it still. A A

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 05-23-08 - 01:47 am Title: Ch4- truth

I hope I wasn't too critical for you because ultimately I'm enjoying this story a lot. Nice short chapters, great premise, fun predicament Ororo's in and yet doesn't know, what's not to like? I look forward to more.

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 05-23-08 - 01:43 am Title: trouble?

Very short chapter but what a wallop it packed! I thought it might be the other way around but I like this turn of events. You've put quite a twist on the old I'm your father - I mean son - routine and that's something.

I'm not going to say anything else after this but I would recommend getting a beta to help you out, maybe you can look for one on the forum? Oh, one last thing. There are a lot of stories that immediately turn me off when I see a ton of misspelled words and odd grammatical turns but for all my comments in my reviews for your story this isn't one of them.

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 05-23-08 - 01:36 am Title: chapter 2

I like Lenox. A lot actually and I've said it a million times by now but I seldom like OC's, usually hate them. And because I like him I'd ask him all kinds of questions if he, good looking mug that he is, was hanging out all night with me and my buddies.

I think since they partied late into the wee morning hours that they might have asked Lenox more questions simply to get to know who it was they were drinking with and almost as a matter of course they would have discovered he was up for a teaching position which might have led them to believe he could be a possible candidate at their school. I’m really not trying to nitpick, really. I think I'd want to know if he was going to be sticking around or not. I could see Jubilee drilling him but then she could’ve still been speechless and the others simply too drunk since they were out till 2am . Don’t mind me – really – please. I honestly like this story and will keep reading.

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 05-23-08 - 01:26 am Title: Ch1 the new guy

I’m going to have to start by saying some of the wording is different, perhaps a little awkward. I’m not saying that to be mean, Lord knows I’m not it just had to be said. I still have an image of Lenox holding onto an empty bag of skin or a doppelganger of some type as “he walked his naked form to the small closet” like an errant child or something. BUT that aside you captured my attention immediately. The premise has really intrigued me. It’s obvious there’s a connection between Logan and Lenox and I’m curious just what it is.

Reviewer: vENomQueen Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-22-08 - 06:18 am Title: Ch4- truth

Oh Snap! This is so good. I can't believe that Wolverine is a da! :) What will happen when Ororo finds out? Please continue, it's like a soap opera.

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-21-08 - 02:07 pm Title: Ch4- truth

I can't wait to see how things turn out in the next chapter.

Reviewer: VenomQueen Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-09-08 - 07:14 am Title: trouble?

OMG!!! Lenox is his kid????? OMG! What happens next?

Reviewer: Jade of Purple Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-14-08 - 06:57 pm Title: trouble?

What?! All I can say is DRAMA.

Pretty good story.

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-11-08 - 10:15 pm Title: trouble?

Great chapter!!!!!!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter UPDATE SOON.

Reviewer: NikNak Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-11-08 - 01:10 am Title: trouble?

Whoa! Totally didn't see that coming. That was crazy. Suggestion though, while the story is good, it could do for some pacing and tighter dialouge. Just a suggestion!

Reviewer: Angel Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 02-23-08 - 03:27 pm Title: chapter 2

I love this!!!!!

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 02-22-08 - 01:05 am Title: chapter 2

Loved it I can't wait to read more so update soon.

Reviewer: joe Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 02-15-08 - 08:39 pm Title: Ch1 the new guy

hey i like the story it's pretty good your just making a few grammer errors apart from that u hav a interesting storyline and an intriging OC hope to read more shortly
joe

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 02-11-08 - 04:02 pm Title: Ch1 the new guy

Wow. This sounds very promising! I look forward to your next update!!

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