Okay. You've got to make this more emotional. To me, it's as if Storm's saying, "Okay, I got raped. I'll get over it." As if this was some casual event. Rape is not something you get over that easy. It's a traumatic event. It'll take time for her to heal. I know it's dangerous for her to give in to her emotions, but, this will have to be an exception.

Also, I don't think she'd've let Kurt take her easily. The proposal.... okay, love the idea, but... right after she's raped? Skeptical.

Okay, now my favorite character to talk about, Sabretooth. I think Storm would struggle more. Plus, there's the scream issue. I honestly don't think she'd scream when he told her to. My issue with that is it's as if she's telling him she's his. I think she would've held it in for as long as possible. Otherwise, he wins, and we all know Storm's not like that.

Overall, though, great story. Sorry if I seem critical, it's just that it didn't seem believable.

ok, how do I say this... YOU ARE ABOUT TO BE KILLED BY A LION, yes by me. Why do you guys do this, I hate it, guess I know how Tiger feels now. anyway yours is one of my fav stories, so you better keep writing...

Damn Sabertooth...always having to scare someone! lol. Don't mind me...I'm just being silly. I definitely like the story so far. I wonder if Sabes will get Ro or if Logan will be able to stop him. hmmm...guess I'll have to wait to find out in future chapters. Write more soon!

Very nice beginning:) Can't wait to read more:)