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Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09-24-09 - 02:14 am Title: Decidions

Good chapter and nice to have Scott's POV. It amused me that Scott didn't tell Jean about what happened. I really do like him in this and Remy's not bad for comic relief. I can see things turning bad if Ro finds out about the bet though i am looking forward to some RoLo.

You know I was looking on the site for beta's and there isn't a listing at all. You have to click on an author's name to see if they're a beta. I often think I should try to beta for you but I've been having problems with the laptop so I don't think I'd be reliable. Also, I didn't think your characters came off racist I just found some of their behavior questionable, possibly because I'm not 'hip' so to say? I'd be interested in hearing what someone younger thought. At any rate hope you get some sleep and I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it :) I didn't think it would be very interesting if Scott told Jean about their trouble (I'm not going to let them off the hook so easy ;) I hope I'll be able to write the next chapter this weekend, that's the only time I'm not very busy and I can actually get some rest. Keep on reading :)) -Ana

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09-21-09 - 12:40 am Title: 'Dazzler'

This has taken me a long time to decide to post this review, it’s going to be long and not altogether full of gushing praise and I hope you don’t take it the wrong way but there are some issues with your story that I feel compelled to address. I have to first say I love the guys, have said that numerous times before I’m sure and I especially love your Scott. I just wanted to reach out and hug that man. Nice job with him. I find, oddly enough, that I enjoy the guys much more than I do Ororo although Creed and Logan ’s childish bickering is getting a little tiresome. I still like your Vic though and I’d enjoy reading more about the guys bumbling adventures sans the women. The fact that Bella beats Remy up is baffling but continues to intrigue and some how amuse me all at the same time as it’s true to life unfortunately.

I have however, continually wondered if the guys are just flat out stupid since not one of them thought to make a simple collect call back home. It’s a simple thing, Jean would be happy to accept the charges wherever she is or at least I’d imagine she would since they’re getting married. She could then easily wire money to them or any of their friends or family members could for that matter. There are indeed pay phones in Vegas having been there a few times myself and as they had to be off the strip since they were in a café they probably would’ve found one fairly easy or they could go into any hotel/casino and find one near the restrooms. And I’m sure they could have filled out forms regarding their lost ID’s at the police station as it can’t be an all together out of the ordinary thing to happen in Vegas although I don’t know the details in that having never lost my ID in Vegas. I love that city though which is one of the many reasons your story interested me. It’s especially fun when you’re driving instead of relying on hotel shuttles and very easy to get around if you take the back roads behind the strip. We even found a comic book store not far from the strip. I know that has nothing to do with the story but it was fun discovering it, made me love Vegas all the more.

Okay, back to the subject at hand. I thought long and hard about not saying anything about some of the things that have left me befuddled but I decided I really feel the need to say something about some of the comments regarding minorities that you’ve sprinkled in various chapters, particularly these last two chapters. First there was a comment by one of the Keystone cops and now at one point you have Ali saying to Ororo, “You can bet your black ass I won’t!” I don’t know but would a white friend actually say that to her friend of color? It just seems inappropriate to me but maybe that’s how close friends of different races are nowadays, a younger generation perhaps. I also have to wonder does anyone think it odd if a Chinese person speaks with different accents? Would a Chinese person speaking with an American accent be any different? Considering Imperialism it shouldn’t really be too surprising and nowadays America truly is a wonderful melting pot of all nationalities with various accents. I have to also tell you Betsy isn’t Chinese, she’s Japanese or rather her body is.

I know I just keep going on but I’ve enjoyed your story so much, it’s fun and fresh and unique, so I can’t help myself. And that brings me to the grammar. A beta would be an immense help to you and I know I mentioned that you might want to look into getting one before. I think at first the story is so appealing and fresh that one’s able to ignore the grammar and of course understanding that English isn’t your fist language makes one more receptive but as the story continues it can become a little problematic even a little wearing. I think more people would be inclined to give the story a chance and continue reading if you did recruit a beta. There’s a list of betas here on the site and some good authors are included.


Author's Response: You have good points there. It crossed my mind quite few times to get them to call home but I honestly forgot about all the places you can get a phone (I was thinking about doing that in the next chapter when I get the time to finish it since I've been busy as hell, I swear I haven't gotten over 3 hours sleep in the last 3 weeks... sorry, that's not the subject at hand) I've never been to Vegas or even on the continent so I'm relying on whatever I find on internet so I might have much incorrect descriptions. About having Ali say what she did to Ro I never meant for her to sound even nearly like a racist or something so I apologize if I got anyone offended. She was supposed to sound like angry friend. I should have looked more into Betsy about her being Japanese so no worries I'll fix that, tnx for telling me btw. I still haven't heard Japanese person to talk with British accent so maybe it would sound a bit weird and interesting to me so I made it to sound like that to Logan. I still don't know very well my way on this side because I' afraid that by pressing somewhere I might screw something up (probably just silly believes of mine) but I'll look into that beta. Man, this was my longest response so far but never mind. Thank you for reviewing, I'll try to fix as much of all this as I can so the story would be more readable. I hope the next chapters will be more enjoyable and tnx again for everything :)

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09-03-09 - 03:42 pm Title: 'Dazzler'

I can't wait to see how things turn out in the next chapter.

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09-02-09 - 11:25 pm Title: Free to go

I haven't read this or the next chapter yet but wanted to tell you the e-mail alerts seem to have a problem, the links aren't working, and I had no idea this was the favorite story that had updated. I'm going to read both chapters tomorrow at work and will let you know what I think. It'll be a fun little treat to look forward to!

Author's Response: Great! Can't wait to hear your opinion I hope you'll like it :)

Reviewer: shejams Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08-11-09 - 02:58 pm Title: Old friends

OMG!!! This is hilarious!!
I was pleasantly surprised with this story. It is great. I love this. I am still laughing.

The plot, the humor, the special guest stars and the characterization of Logan and company is well played out.

Logan- doesn't believe in love (except for beer, smoking and sex) when I read that line I knew this was going to be good

Remy- when he told his story of how a jealous Bella was taking up Karate lessons and praticing on him, had me rolling on the floor laughing.

Scott- breaking in almost poetry when talking about Jean brought tears of laughter to my eyes.

and Victor- typical Creed aw man what can I say *snicker*

RO- my girl, love her in this.

Kitty, Piotr, Bishop, Cable, Bobby and Pyro - perfect

Let me tell you, I wasn't feeling to great this morning but when I read this I felt much better ( laughter is really good for the soul)] :XD

Even though English is not your first language and that there are some spelling and grammar error , this is still an easy and a great read.

Thank you for this!

Keep up the good work and update soon!

Author's Response: WOW! Thank you so very much! I`m glad it made your day and that you like it so much. Next chapter should be up soon. Stay toon!

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 08-08-09 - 02:25 pm Title: Old friends

I was glad to see you’d updated, looked for this third update all weekend, and I was very glad to have more Ororo in this chapter. It was quite interesting finding out about the Bishop connection. He’s always a favorite of mine and I like how you’ve used him here. I was also glad the Keystone Cops weren’t in this chapter, the way they acted and some of the things they said were a little out there and they kind of took away from the story a bit for me. I guess I just missed the guys and their banter while being outwitted by Ororo. After reading this chapter I'm looking forward to getting back to that, especially any forthcoming RoLo. I’m very curious to see how that’s going to come about.

Author's Response: I`m glad you liked it :) I`m curios bout RoLo myself btw. I think of all this things while I write, so all in due time ;)

Reviewer: smalltowngirl Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08-05-09 - 01:01 am Title: Old friends


That was funny. I liked the free as a bird statement! It reminded me of the song freebird.
-Amber

Author's Response: Glad it made you laugh :)

Reviewer: smalltowngirl Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08-01-09 - 08:50 pm Title: Lock up

Ororo and bishop used to date? I can't believe she is bailing them out. This just keeps getting better.
-Amber

Reviewer: lexia09 Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 08-01-09 - 02:23 pm Title: Introductions

Wow those guys just can't get a break! I almost feel sorry for them, almost, it's hard for me to feel sorry for Vic! Lol! Keep up the good work!
Lexia

Author's Response: Haha, tnx I will :) Well where would be the fun of it if I gave them a break ;)

Reviewer: Cee Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08-01-09 - 02:20 pm Title: Out on the street

This tickled me. Still loving Logan and Vic. I always love Vic.

Remy's explanation about Bella always beating him up also made me chuckle. Poor guy. Given his history in the comics, I totally believe that.

Author's Response: Yea, I always love Vic too, he`s one of my favorite characters alongside with `Ro and Logan, well and Remy too. Tnx for reviewing :)

Reviewer: smalltowngirl Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08-01-09 - 02:14 pm Title: More trouble on the way!


That was hilarious. I like that you brought bishop into this. I think he is rarely used. How are they getting out of jail and what will 'Ro do?

- Amber

Author's Response: Bishop was the perfect cop, I just had to bring him in it with cable as his partner :) About the rest, you`ll have to find out in the next chapter(s) coz I ain`t telling ;)

Reviewer: lexia09 Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 08-01-09 - 03:13 am Title: Introductions

Omg! This story rocks! They didn't get the car back? What the hell is wrong with those crazy guys?! They are soo freaking clueless! Lol! Continue, I like this!

Alexia

Author's Response: Glad you like it :) Well bout those crazy guys, you`ll have to read what I have in store for them in the next chapter. So stay toon ;)

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 08-01-09 - 03:06 am Title: Out on the street

I'm going to tell you this has fast become a favorite story of mine I really love the guys hanging out together, their whole cluelessness as to what to do after being bested by a girl and now they can't even find her. I'm thinking she picked a lock and can't wait to see if that's what she did or not.

Remy's story was a hoot. I really like your depiction of him and it didn't sound crazy how Bella was taking her rage out on him. You made it believable in a non wussy way and amusing to boot. I like Scott here too and Vic, like him calling Logan Lo, you seldom see that, it fits. You continue to do a wonderful job, language barrier or not, and the updates, good Lord woman you rock!

Author's Response: Wow, I`m so glad you like it so much and me btw :))) About `Ro you`ll just have to wait and see ;) And I`m glad you liked Remy`s story, it just came to me while I was writing the chapter, well pretty much everything came while I was writing it. Bout Vic, I just never could imagine calling Logan anything but Lo or Runt, even Wolverine sounds kind of wrong to me coming from him. I do have one bad news thought. Tonight I`m hitting the road myself so I might not be able to update as fast as I did so far. I hate it but that`s how things are... On the other hand I`ll try to update ch.6 today. That is if my bro moves his ass from the computer ;)

Reviewer: smalltowngirl Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-31-09 - 07:53 pm Title: Out on the street


So they got the car back, now what? Was their stuff still in there?
Does Ororo have her powers or did she pick the lock? This chapter really made me wonder! Awesome chapter. :-)
-Amber

Author's Response: tnx :) btw, why do you think they got the car back? ;) Stay toon to find out what happens next!

Reviewer: cee Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-31-09 - 02:11 am Title: What now?

Yeah, I`m pretty sure he`s hoping I`m burning in hell right now…

I HOPE SHE`S BURNIN IN HELL RIGHT NOW!

That made me giggle. Poor Logan.

I'm enjoying the bit of Russian you tossed in here, too. I know that Nowhere_Man loves Colossus and was wanting to get some more phrases to use when writing that character in his fics. Okay, until your next update, poka!!

Author's Response: Zdravstvuite, (hello :) glad you enjoyed it. I found this phrases on the internet, just write the word that you need on English than add "on Russian" (example-hello on russian). Nowhere_Man can try that if he didn`t already. Poka ;)

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