Wow.. *smiles*... that was... wow. lololol Your descriptions were fabulous. I could see myself standin' right next to Logan, pretty much under the same spell. That was enticing an' very enjoyable. Great job. --- W6C

*would review but has lost the power of speech... this was..... really... erotic an'... really.... WOW... really nice*

Great job. --- W6C

One o' my favorite poems. Beautiful.

Kay.......... you just brought me to my knees.... *can't breathe here*.... loved their relationship, the playfulness, the obvious love an' passion, lifted me right up............. sat here smilin' imaginin' that all for myself, for me an' my girl....... an' then you crushed me..........

Was wonderfully written, the imagery was superb........ dont like the end. Written well....... but you tricked me into readin' a sad endin'... that just ran me through the wringer....... right now i'm torn between bawlin' my eyes out in fear/grief an' tryin' to critique it.....dont think i can do both right now. Not what I needed right now... with so much RoLo turmoil goin' on right now that endin' was not what I needed....... I'll try to give ya' an "author to author" critique once I shake this off. --- Traumatized W6C

That was a sorrow filled piece. I'd like to see another version though, from Logan's pov. I like this from Ro's side, but not likin' the way the endin' makes Logan look.... how about showin' us his side of this? C'mon, you can do it, we know ya' can. *grins* Very nice ficlet though, it shows how sorrow, like many emotions, can be felt on many levels, directly as well as indirectly. Nice job. --- W6C

*chuckles* This is a great chapter, Cee. A wonderful start. Even as a weary old man, Logan still has the spirit and spunk of his youth. This is really great. Excelllent job. --- W6C

Author's Response: You know me. I love Logan as much as I love RoLo itself. I see him as someone who would age with character and dignity, even if he had to rely on other people. I hope you get to read a couple of the updates I made to this story in your nonexistent spare time, AND I hope you get to update Eye. You know I adore that fic. Thanks for the lovely feedback, and thanks for visiting, W6C.

Well, I must say it's interesting to see someone's pov of a "first time". It's a short piece but has intensity. It also embodies the same contradicting sensations of a true "first time" doesn't it? It leaves me with a feeling that consists of both passion and emptiness. Emptiness for the quickness of it, describing only the actions without true insight into the characters' inner feelings during the act. Which I think is a fantastic euphemism for the coldness and lack of profound emotions that often seem to be associated with the quickness of a first time event. But the descriptions of the act itself, what he saw and said, what she said and expected brings the cold reality of the first time act into clear and inarguable focus. Although I personally prefer to include tons of emotional connection and passion between the two... I cannot deny, in truth, that this was very nicely done. Bravo. --- W6C

Author's Response: Maybe the 'first time' has no feelings included because you just want to get it over with... or maybe it's just the way I wrote it...hell I don't know... Thanks for reviewing though...;P