Date: 07-25-05 - 11:29 pm Title: Meeting the Kids
Oh shite!! Don't tell me one of the kids walked in on them. Ro should have known better... especially since the kids were awake. Um I like this story... it has a lot of potential. However, I noticed you have several grammatical errors and your descriptions of the setting, characters, etc. could be.... well, a little more descriptive. I would be happy to beta for you. Should you decide that you would like to have a beta, please e-mail me at thewindrider278@yahoo.com. Other than that, I think you have amazing ideas and can't wait to read more of this story.
Date: 07-25-05 - 08:33 pm Title: Meeting the Kids
Update soon....kick Creed to the curb...and Silver too.
Date: 07-25-05 - 07:43 pm Title: Meeting the Kids
Kid's, will catch you in the act every time. Well when do we have the big fight between Victor & Logan, Ororo & Silver Fox. Should be interesting. Love the kiddies. :D