Date: 03-02-08 - 09:13 pm Title: 1
This fic has a lot of potential but I feel like the scene was a little rushed and the transition between emotional breakdown and sex felt a little uncomfortable. You could do a little more to enhance the emotional background of the story... It just feels too shallow. I'd love to help if you would like.
Author's Response: Thank you, i would like your help
Date: 01-10-07 - 07:54 pm Title: 1
continue!!!! its really good!!!!
Date: 04-19-06 - 04:07 pm Title: 1
This fic is pretty good, I'd like to read more and see where the story goes. So update A.S.A.P.
Date: 04-10-06 - 11:57 pm Title: 1
The story is OK, but you really need to refine your writing. Some parts seem rushed and the bad grammar makes other parts hard to understand. Now that you started writing you should look for more ways to improve, there are amazing writers around who can guide you through the process, so you can become one of them.
Date: 04-10-06 - 02:35 pm Title: 1
loved the part bout Jean bein a cold hearted bitch. haha..lol. this cant be the end rite?.... come on. u gotta continue this. give me more Jean hating parts. u really really gotta continue this. =D
Author's Response: im gonna continue it salad dont worry and thanks