That's great. Sara and Callisto as troublemaking spies. Great cliffhanger. And I love the back story for Logan's career with helicopters. I almost pictured him as a paramedic doing ambulance air transports, but this was just as good. Madelyne Pryor as Jean's less manic but equally bitchy twin? Love that. We could get some mileage out of that.

Ororo with FRECKLES! Ingenious. Fresh angle. She almost never has freckles in any story I have ever read. The thought occurred to me that I don't think we've even established what kind of hair Ororo has...now I have to look back at the chapters. Ororo with airsickness is new, too. Claustrophobia? Definitely. I love your creativity, kid.

Author's Response: Yea I thought the freckles would be kawaii. I always thought that once a plane was in the air Ro wouldn't have problems, but the pressure from take off would not mix so well. There are a ton of things that the minor and supporting characters to do. I'm working on alot of stuff. I know you're gonna knock it out of the stratosphere again