This is very different. I'm guessing it's in screenplay format which is fine. It's dark. Marie's dark, Ororo's dark and Kitty's grown up a lot, seems quite cynical. I love Peter and Illyana, the latter being one of my all time favorite characters after Storm and Dani I think. The scene with Peter was nice, great descriptions, very nice.

Now I'm not sure where this is going, not quite sure what to think of this either but I'm intrigued. A darker version of the X-Men has much potential.

There's only one problem that I see which is that you have a lot of misspelled words. Normally a few here and there is no biggy but there are some that actually hinder the story. When you say "Xavier's gave" instead of Xavier's grave it's easily understood typo, but when you have "headless rain" it gives unwanted amusing visions which I think ruin the mood. And I'm guessing when she's talking to Scott the misspelled words are due to a drunken slur. Aside from that it's a story I'm looking forward to reading more of.