[Report This]Date: 07-06-07 - 09:34 am Title: Blood flows
I haven't read a story with this type of raw feeling to it ever. It reminds me of a good comic of old back when they had a sense of family feel to them. I sped read through this as fast as I could it captured my attention so completely. It's very intense and of course I'm dying to see what happens next. The only thing - I thought he'd killed Emma - wah! ;P
[Report This]Date: 06-29-07 - 07:08 pm Title: Blood flows
You already know I'm enjoying this story, but this chapter was chock full of excitement, and I always love any dialogue between Logan and Kitty, particularly references to their previous miniseries back in the day. You've also made me like Emma, something I only do grudgingly under normal circumstances. Good work. Keep it coming. I will have a bit of time to beta this week, too...
[Report This]Date: 06-29-07 - 01:22 am Title: Blood flows
OMG!!!! When he took that ring off I wanted to beat him over the head with a stick.
[Report This]Date: 06-07-07 - 04:47 pm Title: Blood Freezes
I can't help but enjoy that last kill - yum, the perfect one to go in my opinion. I'm still quite intrigued. Next up - Kitty? Yipes! Oh, and I noticed last chapter you mentioned you weren't great with spelling so all spelling mistakes are forgiven because I'm really enjoying this. The short chapters pack a wallop and of course make it easy for me to read in snatches at work. Nicely done.
Author's Response: Cant thank ya enough for the kind reveiws. I never thought about it but yea it was kind of Vader ala episode 2 lol I apologize again for the spelling i really am trying to fix that. BUt i am glad that you still enjoy it none the less
[Report This]Date: 06-07-07 - 04:44 pm Title: Blood starts
Whoa. Kinda going all young Darth Vader on us, eh? Wow, this is full of suspense. I like it.
[Report This]Date: 06-07-07 - 04:36 pm Title: Eyes and Blood
Very interesting this. A good short prelude.
[Report This]Date: 06-04-07 - 05:57 pm Title: Blood starts
Great characterizations again. Little spelling nitpicks for this chapter, when you go to upload the next one:
Freulain - change it to "Fraulein"
mein friend - mein freund
Bettsy - Betsy
I won't pick the rest of them to death, since this is your comment box, and I'm not done gushing over this. I enjoy this as an ensemble piece that uses all the characters you chose well, which is always good to remember even if the story centers around one couple. Good work.
Author's Response: Im glad i got ya hooked Cee :) you and many of the others have done the same to me only fair i TRY and do the same lol. First off im sorry again for the errors. I spent a good hour going through my comics trying to find the correct spellings but i must have missed them. i went through at least a dozen comics with nightcrawler and not once did he say mein freund or Fraulein, i had to have just skipped over them KItty pryde and Wolverine mini was one of my all time favs, i had to put a element of it in here same with OHAS
[Report This]Date: 06-04-07 - 05:54 pm Title: Blood Freezes
Okay. Now I'm hooked.
You brought in familiar elements of stories and comics I love, most recognizably Astonishing Xmen and the Enemy of the State arc of Wolverine. Kitty's the perfect person to take Logan on, and possibly take him out, since he trained her back in their miniseries (like, waaaaaaaaaay back in the day, since I'm old as dirt).
I enjoyed the dialogue. The only thing that was missing was a transition for how the mansion ended up on fire, since I don't remember where he lit it up, or where something exploded strongly enough to cause it, so I might have missed a detail when I read it. Other than that, this is a great little story with good characterizations. Keep it coming! This one and that other one I like so much.
Author's Response: Ahh yes i kind of took a cheaters way out on that. I just assumed that when the Blackbird crashed into the mansion (IT was the mainsion wasnt it? ill have to look back over the comic) that a fire would start form it , Forgive me for taking the easy way out ill make up for it...........I hope lol Thanks again Cee :)
[Report This]Date: 06-03-07 - 09:19 pm Title: Blood Freezes
Oh no what's going to happen!???
[Report This]Date: 06-03-07 - 08:52 pm Title: Blood starts
Still likeing this a lot!
[Report This]Date: 06-03-07 - 08:39 pm Title: Eyes and Blood
Hit enter aft you end a sentence start a paragraph so it'll be easier to read but this is good.
Author's Response: My epes have been opened to the spacing thing my bad ill fix it right up thank ya much for the review :)
[Report This]Date: 06-03-07 - 03:36 am Title: Blood Freezes
DOUBLE DANG!!!!!!!!!!!
What in the world of mutants is going on. How in the world did Logan get caught and controlled to do harm to his family. Grrrrrrrr
LOL
Rolletti
[Report This]Date: 06-03-07 - 03:20 am Title: Eyes and Blood
DAAAAAANG WHAT HAPPENED????!!!!!!!!! Amazing job for a first fic. Now I'm intreged. Is that spelled right? Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm LOL
Rolletti
Author's Response: Dont ask me im damn lucky spelling my own name half the time But thank you very much
Date: 06-03-07 - 01:21 am Title: Eyes and Blood
Just a suggestion, you may want to space outt he paragraphs, because they are all jumbled adn makes it difficult to read adn follow what's going on.
Author's Response: I did not think of that i shall start dong so on my next chapters sorry for that thank you for pointing it out though
[Report This]Date: 06-01-07 - 08:28 pm Title: Blood starts
great story, did'nt think u'd update so quick... not complaining!
the double personality and fight within logans mind is reflected really well her
keep updating.. so many questions
Author's Response: thank ya very much yea i did the 2 chapters back to back pretty much i had the itch to crank out anothoer one
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