Love it!!! Please update soon!!

I read chapters 13 – 15 while at work and actually couldn’t stop reading. Do you know I copied and pasted the chapters and saved it as a document and chapters 13 – 20 total 218 pages?! I thought, good grief I can’t read all this but I breezed through eight chapters. Well, a few observations:

I do not like Ali like you like her and Ororo isn’t quite the Storm we know but the more human Storm you always write, as if she’s just a normal woman off the street living her ho hum life just like any woman but it all works. I do sometimes wish I could wash her mouth out with soap though. But I've been absolutely captivated by the stalker and the changes in Logan!

A little off topic but I have to say this, old fashion cocoa yes! That’s the only way to make it unless you actually melt chocolate chips/bittersweet chocolate for a thicker version a la Italian chocolate which is absolutely to die for. I know it's in another chapter but I love that Logan knew how to make it.


Author's Response: Ali isn't even one of my favorite females in Marvel, but she's a mellow character, often silly, and to me, a good foil to Ororo when she's dealing with hangups. I can't write her like Windy writes Ali, namely in her Ultimate incarnation. When I think of her, I think of how Claremont wrote her, when she was still with Longshot in the Outback, just kind of ditzy, image-obsessed, silly and warm. I'll keep her language in check more in the future *makes big puppy eyes*. And yeah, I got so used to making my cocoa that way, that when Juice finally brought home some generic instant cocoa, that stuff tasted like water.

Can't wait to read more *runs to the next chappy* ^_^

Author's Response: :-) There's a little more!