As many times as I've read different variations of how a RoLo family life would be like, Ceecee ya always put your own spin on things. I took special notice of Logan's role in his household too. The favoring nature he had with both his daughters struck such a compelling cord that, it seemed like a page taken straight from a play write. Ororo taking the role of the no nonsense mom, especially since I know their daughters would have Logan wrapped around their fingers.

Ororo from the beginning struck me as being the backbone of this family. Where Logan can be more easy going, Ororo is the person to keep things on tract. But they play well against each other because I know Logan will step in when even Ororo gets flustered. Either way they all struck me as a strong family household.

And to be honest, (no pressure because I know you have much on the plate as it is) I would have loved to see more of this written out. Even have the present day family life mixed in with flashbacks that fleshed out in more detail how Logan and Ororo got together.

Of course like I said, I know you got all sorts of things your working on already, but given how well this story was. I thought I'd just have to say.


Author's Response: This is a one-shot, and it was already growing pretty long by the time I wrote the scene with the kids. But you're probably right. More concerning how they fell in love would make sense. I just wanted to offer a brief glimpse of how the ice might have been broken between them, where they became more than grudging acquaintances and really just became friends. The scene between Ororo and Mariko combing her hair was inspired by pretty much any time I'm with my daughter Taylor. The difference is, my husband can't braid hair, but he has taken the kids off my hands when we've all driven each other nuts. And he DOES call my coffee creamer "that crap you like." Constantly. I don't have a strong family household myself, but I do idealize what that would involve. Thanks for your thoughtful and insightful feedback, Brandon. I always enjoy hearing from you.

My apologies, I didn't realize you posted another chapter. I have to say this addition left a better feeling in my gut to these two future. The alternative pretense of Gambit helped to fill in some of the scene. And i'm glad you didn't play too much into Emma's role. (granted she's to be in Origins also, we'll overlook that)

I have to agree with another person's review, this chapter seemed more emotional driven. The havoc that Ororo plays on Logan's heart, is really well felt. Almost understand why he sought to be with Emma...Almost.

Either way, a nice addition. Just as good or even more so than the first.

Author's Response: No apologies needed. In fact, I should apologize. I've been meaning to read and review your fic, but I haven't had a lot of free time. Know that it's on my "to-do" list, and I look forward to it! *Grin*

Interesting chapter. A lot of good dialogue is written between Ororo and Remy, you can truly feel that the two of them are completely from two different worlds and this incident between them has really been alarming to say the least.

I'm still trying to get a feel for the direction the story will be going, but I think that's just a reflection of the fact you're having a bit of the same problem as well.

But I was thinking off-handed and I have an idea of where you can take the story, if you choose to use it. I'll email it to you. Tell me what you think.

Either way, keep writing! ^^ You gals keep giving me inspiration to keep going to.

Author's Response: thanks for sending the email. I liked your insight into my plot. I enjoyed writing the dialogue, it started off with them righteously angry at each other, then kinda diverged to them bickering.

Hon, definitely feels like you have a better 'feel' for where you want to take this story. I noted that you had a lot of good use of metaphors running through this chapter.

After we've seen the development of Remy and Bella's relationship, I have to wonder if part of the attraction he has with Ororo stems from the fact that he has so much control over everything that's happening to her currently. For instance with Bella, she was a fiery talent that constantly twisted and competed with for dominance, but with Ororo's growth, Remy is basically pulling all the strings.

I like seeing Logan slowly but surely making more of a presence in this story. I'm having the belief again, that out of all the players in this story, Logan is going to be the one that's that going to be the most honest with her. He's basically been at each stage of Ororo's development. And since he's an outside player, he has the most objective view on everything. And although he might not be one of the most favorite people right now, I can see that changing soon.

Anyway later lass, keep up the good work!

Author's Response: I'm grinning and glowing over here, friend. Yes, Logan will likely have a good understanding of Ororo, but he will have to get to know her first, and she already has it in mind that he's too poky, nosy and opinionated for her taste, where she's trying to rise above where she's been. Ororo will have issues with Remy, too, and he won't be the only one pulling strings, considering the industry she's standing at the threshold of. Bella will pop up once in a while. The honeymoon period for Ororo is just about over. Thanks for the compliments and suggestions! Glad you liked the metaphors.

Hmmm...I was always wondering if someone was ever going to make an addition to that episode. I've had an idea in mind but rather it would be going in the opposite direction. A story of how Storm and Wolverine met. And despite being in war times how they found love and got married.

I have to say this was an interesting read. But the way you have the summary stated, I was thinking that you had planned for a long series.

Also for a bit of critique, have to remember to capitalize the letter in the beginning of each sentence. Dialogue included. There are various areas were that's not done.

Anyway, look forward to more.

Author's Response: Your story idea sounds interesting. If you ever write it, I'd like to read it. I do have plans for using these two in future Beacon stories, though those stories wont necessarily focus on them, but if you have any suggestions for rewriting the summary for this story so that it sounds like a one shot I'd like to hear them. And thanks for the critique. I'll look through the story and fix that problem.

Another nice one-shot Rose. A lot of nice description in the opening of the story, really sets the mood. Anyway don't worry about getting back to your main story. Sometimes it's nice to get these little stories out, every once and a while.

Author's Response: Yay! Another review :D Thanks for the kind words, NoWhere_Man.

Keeping moving along with the second chapter. You have a few details that I loved. The origin of Logan's Wolverine name, I thought that was kind of clever. Not to mention a few key sentences of description, such as the light bulb color.

I honestly thought Ororo was going to ask to stay with Logan, until they capture the killer. But perhaps that comes in the future. Either way, some good stuff hon. Great to see you updated.

You know the only problem i'm having with these one-shots. I'm wanting you to continue a few of them. Oh well, you have excelled at being able to capture small heartfelt moments in a manner of a few pages of work. Please keep 'em coming hon, I look forward to your next work.

Author's Response: Your in luck, this one will be continued. If you paid really close attention to the summary and/or the author's notes it'll say this was intended as a flashback (at least Im pretty sure it said that, lol) But anyways, don't fret, this will be continued. Thanks for reviewing!