Started reading this fic and I was transfixed. I soooo love the dynamic you have going on here...there's only one problem...it's not finished! Please, please, please finish this.

Funny. Well Written. Personalities are believable. Overall Nice Job. Can't Wait for next chapter

LOVE this story so far and hope you update soon! btw, would really appreciate it if you could email me when you update


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So nice to see so many updates from you! And this was a really long chapter too, a wonderful bonus. I loved the car scene, so funny, so true – his brain broke! Lol! And how he decoded the calls, brilliant! The whole car/phone scene was simply brilliant! Getting out of the car – hilarious, Jean Paul – hilarious – the hooker convention?!? LMBO! I nearly died when I read that – all of Jean Paul’s lines for that matter had me cracking up. No one writes Jean Paul like you!

And what a way to leave us hanging! I suppose that’s why they call them cliff hangers. Argh! You’re such a tease! Well, I’ve learned to wait patiently for your updates but I don’t mind being surprised – i.e. with a faster update. Mind you I’m not complaining. We may have to wait but oh how it’s worth it! You simply excel. Thank you, thank you! :D

An update to come home to after a long week at work. That's how I like my work week to end. I giggled the whole time reading this because I can just see the hysteria in my head. Ororo jumping for the phone, Betsy headbanging up a storm, Jean-Paul's "eh"-face while he inspects Logan. Cute, funny--it's like reading chicklit. It's nice and fun while being sexy and adult. I can't wait to see what happens with Keiron and Logan. And when is Jeans showing up. I know she's around somewhere.

Love it LOVE it LOVEIT!!!!!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so please keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.

I think I caught an apostrophe-s missing in one line, but the rest of this was clean. Didn't see anything glaring.

My Marvel muses are mutinied and swimming with the sharks. I want to throw the sharks some hot sauce. SO hate Marvel right now.

On to my review. I love the tension in this piece, as usual, and there are the usual details that you do so cohesively without overwording, something I still have not mastered. Ororo's bad driving, Jean-Paul smelling the lard on her breath before she even sat on his lap, her ring tones, and her looking like her grandmother and sounding like his were hysterical. Logan's grace under pressure is fantastic, since that is a quality no one else captures that often. He's likable, real, bright, funny, and has finely tuned bullshit detectors for ears.

If you do a next chapter (please, if ya love me!), it'd be neat just to get a brief description of the dress 'Ro wore. I LOVE ballroom dancing, particularly the costumes. Or in a subsequent chapter. This chapter was fine without it, but that side of my personality that loves fabric and fashions on other people muttered to me "wonder if the dress has sequins and a strappy back?"

In the meantime, I love their arguments just as much as I love the attraction between them. I died laughing when Logan was afraid she was gonna chop him in the neck. That was some good stuff. Now I'm off to find that Tori Amos song, since I haven't listened to a Tori song since "Cornflake Girl." Yeah, I'm that old. The chorus to the one you cited reminds me of a N'dea Davenport song I used to love called "B***s****in'."

LOL!! Oh, what a refreshing story! So natural and funny, has a down home feel to it. Love it! Good thing I decided to visit the Realm. But what if I hadn't? I might have to request you e-mail your stories to me when you post! Just kidding - really - guess I better check out the Realm more often though!