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Reviewer: MaryBrazil Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06-18-14 - 04:11 am Title: chapter 1

To be continued?

Reviewer: danny Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-22-07 - 06:34 pm Title: chapter 1

Damn girl! Keep writing.

Reviewer: Ang Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-21-07 - 11:48 pm Title: chapter 2

DAMN, need I say more.

Reviewer: Anjeline Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-16-07 - 06:14 pm Title: chapter 2

its good so far but the only thing is to work on your grammar ;) im a grammar freak

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review.

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-16-07 - 02:28 pm Title: chapter 2

The all caps made it a weensy bit distracting, and there are different ways we can mark something as a flashback:

Italic text using your "" tags around the paragraphs where they begin and end.

Asterisk marks (*) with a note under Author's Note showing "* means flashback."

{Flashback} in brackets before and after where the scene starts and ends.

All right. Nitpicking over. Another very good chapter with good use of language and no wasted words, lots of plot in this one short chapter. Give us some more, please!

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-16-07 - 02:23 pm Title: chapter 1

There's a lot of good stuff crammed into this short little chapter, but we need to fix your formatting to make the dialogue easier to follow. Well written, believable words coming out of their mouths, and again, good use of the length of the piece, since there are no wasted words, but formatting, punctuation and spelling need fixing. But in the meantime, for a first fic from you, I'm pretty darned happy. Keep it coming.

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review. I know! I know! I did a hit n run with these two chapters! I have to put time on the side to rewrite both chapters. I apologize in advance for the sloppy writing. I am happy with the helpful reviews. If you have any advice for chp 3 please let me know. (After I fix chapter 1 and 2 of course). :)

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-15-07 - 10:13 pm Title: chapter 2

I'm sorry I didn't really read this and I'll tell you why. It's in all CAPS. That and the huge paragraph. My advise is to resubmit this chapter. If you break up the paragraph and put it in lower case I'd read this because the first chapter piqued my curiosity enough to do so. Please consider as it makes it easier on readers and therefore might give you more readers and more reviews. Just some thoughts. No offense is meant at all.

Author's Response: Hey Darlin, First of all thank you for both of your reviews. Don't worry no offence was taken. I will definately go back and rewrite many of my mistakes. In regards to the spelling your absolutely right. I have a wireless card installed and every time I would finish writing the story it would tell me I was working of line and I would have to retype everything since it would be gone when I signed back on. I hope to get a chance later this week and I can"t wait for the new reviews.

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-15-07 - 10:09 pm Title: chapter 1

This is interesting, their bantering certainly but it's one huge unbroken paragraph. You should double space any time someone's talking, break up the huge block so it's easier to read. I don't ususally bother to read much of a story in this format. You also have a few spelling issues, your instead of you're and wispered instead of whispered so I'd advise just re-reading it and doing a spell check. Other than that it's brutally honest and it has potential.

Reviewer: VenomQueen Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-15-07 - 12:57 pm Title: chapter 2

I like it. I like Victor as her love interest, it makes wolverine squirm a little and its a softer side of Victor. Good start.

Author's Response: Thank you ver much for the review. If you get a chance read " Eyes of seduction" and tell me what you think.

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-15-07 - 11:58 am Title: chapter 2

Great chapter!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter see/read what happens to storm and LOGAN next so UPDATE SOON.

Author's Response: Thanks! Hope you also like the following chapters.

Reviewer: Rolletti Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-15-07 - 12:17 am Title: chapter 1

Well I guess she told him! I like your first fic keep writing sweets,

Rolletti

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review. I hope you also like my second fic.

Reviewer: Voli23 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-14-07 - 02:48 pm Title: chapter 1

Freaking awesome!!!! Yaowza!!!!

Author's Response: Hope you like the next chapt as well :)

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-14-07 - 02:21 pm Title: chapter 1

Great strat!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so please keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.

Author's Response: Hey dragon thanks for the review I will update soon. You guys are great.

Reviewer: orororo Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-14-07 - 06:02 am Title: chapter 1

it's realyy good athena!!!
i just don't like that it's victor, i always hate it when he got ro in any fanfics, but that's just me!
u'r fic is really good!!!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review - I must admit I was a little intimidated everyone here has great ideas. Thank you (sorry about victor next story I start we will exclude him.) :)

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