Date: 04-28-18 - 10:34 pm Title: Chapter 2
Needs more Logan& Ororo and then Ororo giving Jean a much needed ass whopping and more sex for Logan& Ororo.
Date: 03-16-18 - 09:17 pm Title: Chapter 2
needs an ending where they stay together.
Date: 09-08-16 - 02:46 pm Title: Chapter 2
Write more soon please.
Date: 07-30-16 - 05:48 am Title: Chapter 1
need update for this story.
Date: 07-28-16 - 11:01 am Title: Chapter 1
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[Report This]Date: 01-30-16 - 06:49 pm Title: Chapter 2
Both chapters were HOT. I wish there was more...
[Report This]Date: 02-15-15 - 08:52 am Title: Chapter 2
Ending coming soon.
[Report This]Date: 02-07-15 - 10:58 am Title: Chapter 2
Next chapter,Jean will not be happy. Make it all Rolo.Please
Date: 06-27-12 - 09:36 pm Title: Chapter 2
great story!
Date: 06-16-12 - 05:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
I agree with your other reviewers - you may want to edit this a bit (the sequence or something maybe?) if it's looking like people aren't understanding your story the way you want them to. I got a distinct non-consensual, rape without reason (as Pari put it) vibe from this, even after reading chapter 2. If that isn't what you want this to come across as, look into editing or maybe getting a betareader? Or at the very least, put a trigger warning label on the summary. I don't read smut all too often, and I tend to steer clear from the particularly triggering things (like non-con or bdsm or whatever) so this made me a little uncomfortable.
Date: 06-16-12 - 04:23 pm Title: Chapter 2
I still don't see how it works as an explanation? Does that mean that chapter 1 was pretty much roleplaying, with Ororo playing a submissive female to Logan's dominant male? So when she said she didn't want to have sex with him (very explicitly, I might add. their relationship in the first chapter seemed to establish that she did not like Logan at all), she didn't mean it?
That explains things, I guess, but it still didn't sit well with me at all. Maybe it could have been executed/delivered better, since readng this was kind of confusing. Chapter 2 seems to completely contradict Chapter 1. You did, after all, introduce things as Logan knowing Ororo had an extreme dislike for him, but had him looking for her for "entertainment" and then ogling her in a really uncomfortable way (his internal comments of "video girl ass, lips made for cocksucking" were gross and blatantly misogynistic to me)
[Report This]Date: 06-15-12 - 02:35 am Title: Chapter 2
Aaah! That brings chapter one in a better perspective.
Date: 06-15-12 - 12:29 am Title: Chapter 2
hmmmm fun story thanks for the read =)
Date: 06-14-12 - 04:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oooh Yeeesss! You have got to update this story, I hope this is not a one-shot. I swear you are the best at writing RoLo fanfic, please keep writing, do not EVER give up on your talent, best wishes to you!
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