Date: 06-15-06 - 05:18 am Title: The Begining
An very good start, update soon. ;)
Date: 06-15-06 - 04:45 am Title: The Begining
you bet your butt I want it to continue...now! Great by the way
Date: 06-15-06 - 03:35 am Title: The Begining
ooo, logan is the father right??? more plz, update
Date: 06-15-06 - 03:26 am Title: The Begining
I LIKE it. And I would love to see more. Hope you post an update soon.
Date: 06-15-06 - 02:54 am Title: The Begining
That was good. I want more.
Date: 06-15-06 - 02:02 am Title: The Begining
Hi.
Interesting beginning. The paragraph formatting got kind of close halfway through, so I might fix that to make it easier to read, use the double paragraph spacing that you have in the first half. Watch a couple of spellings, too; "turquoise, sugary, little, and Rogue" all need fixing.
I'm enjoying this, but I'm wondering if Logan has any suspicions about Ororo's pregnancy? My curiosity is also piqued about whether there is someone else in the picture, from what you have written so far? Keep updating this.
Date: 06-15-06 - 12:54 am Title: The Begining
This was a good little story, even with the fast pace.