Boy, that Logan sure falls in love fast! (grin)

There were tiny, tricky bits of grammar here. They are minor enough that they don't hurt the story in terms of reading it, since the narrative, dialogue and scenes are fantastic, so good job.

“I was hungry.” Her soft African accent highlighting her words. - change "highlighting" to highlighted. Or, say "I was hungry," she replied, her soft, African accent highlighting her words.

Rummage needs another 'm.'

This sentence has a tiny glitch: Ororo was sat at the table eating a piece of coffee cake. Take out "was."

Nitpicking over. The rest is just compliments. You did a good job.