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Reviewer: SuperXFan Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-03-07 - 09:40 am Title: 10. Unchain my heart

I read the firs chapter of this fic and was totally hooked. So I printed out the rest and read it on the train. My goodness this is excellent! I like the combination of suspense and romance. I love Ro and Lo's relationship. Unlike a lot of Rolo's here (smile) I also like Jean. I was afraid she was just going to be superbitch Jean but I think you are doing some interesting things with her.

I also like the pace of the story. You are a very, very good writer. I am astonished that this is your first story, it is so polished and really keeps the reader hooked and wanting more.

I am dying for the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback. I am glad that you like Jean, maybe you can keep my feet to the fire with her so that I can't let her devolve into evil Jean.

Reviewer: Naomi Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-31-07 - 01:48 am Title: 10. Unchain my heart

caught up on all the chapters. Great stuff, really digging the story and wondeing who the psycho is that's feening for Ro.

Author's Response: We're gonna learn a lot about Mr. Covert soon. We actually learn his identity in the next chapter or two.

Reviewer: Burnz Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-31-07 - 12:52 am Title: 10. Unchain my heart

Whew! I'm glad that Jean and Logan worked that out. I thought she had lost her mind for a while in there what with her bringing up that he was seeing someone. It is curious that Forge came back to Xavier's. I wonder what is on his mind. Hmm....Good chapter.

Author's Response: Like Emma said, nobody turns down Xavier! In my universe there is a sorta mythos about Xavier. I haven't done any background exposition but I am trying to convey the idea that Xavier has influence with very powerful people. He is a respected and feared. He can literally pick up a phone and ruin your life. As for Forge, he came back because he actually regrets leaving the way he did. So far we've only seen how Ro has dealt with his abandonment but Forge also needs closure. This is the way that both of them will get it. I also think people will be a bit surprised that Forge believes he is the injured party in the break up.

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-28-07 - 02:40 pm Title: 10. Unchain my heart

Great chapter!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so please keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.

Reviewer: NoirLibra Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-27-07 - 11:43 pm Title: 10. Unchain my heart

Forge is back, Jean's jealous, and we still don't know who the mystery man is. I smell trouble on the horizon.

This is really good.

Reviewer: rolo fan Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-27-07 - 03:12 pm Title: 10. Unchain my heart

forge is the stalker isnt he and he is going to tell ororo and scott isnt he write more plz

Reviewer: nemesisbecoming Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-27-07 - 03:04 am Title: 10. Unchain my heart

Excellent chapter. Great dialogues.

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback!

Reviewer: BrightLady Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-27-07 - 02:40 am Title: 10. Unchain my heart

This chapter ended on a good note. That must mean that something wicked this way comes. Since it seems Forge is not "Mr. Covert", I'm guessing the chain smoking perv is making his way to the school. Because we're missing the 3rd teacher. Please be Remy...

Jean is acting like a selfish, spoiled child. She wants what she can't have. And I have a sneaking feeling that Scott and Ororo will find out about Logan and Jean's indiscretion in the worst possible way.

Thanks so much for updating, Pandora! Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Yup. That about sums up our Jean. She wants Logan to love her from afar while she gets to live happily ever after with Scott. So him telling her that he's in love with Ro just about kills her. I am glad you are enjoying this, I always like your comments, you always seem to intuit where I'm going.

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-27-07 - 01:56 am Title: 10. Unchain my heart

You're really updating fast! A good chapter this though I think Jean's sudden change of heart was rather abrupt. Very well written though, I could really feel the tension between Logan and her.

Author's Response: This chapter wrote itself. I had a bit of a block with the Scott/Jean chapter. But this one just flew. I actually had to cut whole parts of it, it was just huge. I had a lot I wanted Charles and Ro to say. I also needed Ro/Lo & Jean/Scott to connect as a doubles couple. It will have resonance later. I know it seems like Jean's change of heart seems abrupt. The thing is, Jean is a huge contradiction. She loves Scott but she also wants Logan. She hates Logan but she (as she just figured out this second) loves him too. She really is concerned about Logan hurting Ro. She wants Ro to be happy but she doesn't want Ro with Logan. In the end she knows that Logan is right. So she seemingly accepts it. Except she's just acknowledged that Logan was more than just a quick fuck. I think that knowledge is gonna torment our girl a bit.

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-27-07 - 01:42 am Title: 10. Unchain my heart

Man, this was great. I smell foreshadowing along with that garlic and wine, kid! "You might be pleasantly surprised by her response." Jean had nothing else to gain by telling Logan she cared about him, considering the tenor of their breakup, namely that he told her it was over, and he didn't really love her. I wouldn't put it past Miss Sneaky Pants to try to turn the tide again, somehow. Man, this was SO good, Pandora. I grinned and leaned forward with baited breath through the whole thing.

Author's Response: My original outline of this story is a lot different than how this is turning out. In the original, Jean was a lot more evil. She was a real piece of work. I've tried to make her a bit more complex. I don't know if I am succeeding, though. She keeps trying to be bad. Lol!

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