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Reviewer: nemesisbecoming Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-27-07 - 03:04 am Title: 10. Unchain my heart

Excellent chapter. Great dialogues.

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback!

Reviewer: BrightLady Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-27-07 - 02:40 am Title: 10. Unchain my heart

This chapter ended on a good note. That must mean that something wicked this way comes. Since it seems Forge is not "Mr. Covert", I'm guessing the chain smoking perv is making his way to the school. Because we're missing the 3rd teacher. Please be Remy...

Jean is acting like a selfish, spoiled child. She wants what she can't have. And I have a sneaking feeling that Scott and Ororo will find out about Logan and Jean's indiscretion in the worst possible way.

Thanks so much for updating, Pandora! Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Yup. That about sums up our Jean. She wants Logan to love her from afar while she gets to live happily ever after with Scott. So him telling her that he's in love with Ro just about kills her. I am glad you are enjoying this, I always like your comments, you always seem to intuit where I'm going.

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-27-07 - 01:56 am Title: 10. Unchain my heart

You're really updating fast! A good chapter this though I think Jean's sudden change of heart was rather abrupt. Very well written though, I could really feel the tension between Logan and her.

Author's Response: This chapter wrote itself. I had a bit of a block with the Scott/Jean chapter. But this one just flew. I actually had to cut whole parts of it, it was just huge. I had a lot I wanted Charles and Ro to say. I also needed Ro/Lo & Jean/Scott to connect as a doubles couple. It will have resonance later. I know it seems like Jean's change of heart seems abrupt. The thing is, Jean is a huge contradiction. She loves Scott but she also wants Logan. She hates Logan but she (as she just figured out this second) loves him too. She really is concerned about Logan hurting Ro. She wants Ro to be happy but she doesn't want Ro with Logan. In the end she knows that Logan is right. So she seemingly accepts it. Except she's just acknowledged that Logan was more than just a quick fuck. I think that knowledge is gonna torment our girl a bit.

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-27-07 - 01:42 am Title: 10. Unchain my heart

Man, this was great. I smell foreshadowing along with that garlic and wine, kid! "You might be pleasantly surprised by her response." Jean had nothing else to gain by telling Logan she cared about him, considering the tenor of their breakup, namely that he told her it was over, and he didn't really love her. I wouldn't put it past Miss Sneaky Pants to try to turn the tide again, somehow. Man, this was SO good, Pandora. I grinned and leaned forward with baited breath through the whole thing.

Author's Response: My original outline of this story is a lot different than how this is turning out. In the original, Jean was a lot more evil. She was a real piece of work. I've tried to make her a bit more complex. I don't know if I am succeeding, though. She keeps trying to be bad. Lol!

Reviewer: Burnz Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-24-07 - 07:57 pm Title: 9. Bill and Coo

Oh the drama! After such a heavenly week what a way to crash land to earth. Whoa!

Reviewer: vaberella Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-24-07 - 07:08 am Title: 9. Bill and Coo

By the way may I give you props for Emma, she seems like a really nice person who's really actually just doing her job and loving it. She actually would be complimentary to Scott, although I always think Scott needs someone more his anti-thesis. Emma challenges Scott, but really not in a fun way. She compliments him mentally and through loyalty, and only challenges from what I see in the comics physically, sexually. Jean complimented Scott like Romeo compliments Juliette or Oreo cookies and milk. Kind of like you don't know how it happened, but they fit just because they work together or look good together. She doesn't challenge him outside himself.

How about hooking him up with Dazzler, she'd be fun, his definite anti-thesis. Someone energizing and fun, but who could respect Scottt at the same time. Yeah, Allison is a good choice. That's why I like Lizzie Braddock, she brings out the fun but that's why she's good with Warren (another not so fun kind of guy). I might have to throw that shipper idea to some of the other writers.

Author's Response: I never understood the Scott/Jean deal myself. I just figured in the original series she was the only girl so it made sense for all the guys to have a crush on her. But for her, she'd need the alpha male, Scott. In later series and even the movies, I just never GOT Jean and Scott. I actually kinda dug him with Emma. The fact that he succumed so easily to Emma just seemed to me that he had a thing for her. Or maybe he was a sucker for telepaths. We will see a few more teachers though. I am not so sure about Scott turning to someone so easily or so soon though. He is in love with Jean, poor sap. He also takes his vows seriously. Again, poor sap. He might just surprise us in this fic, though.

Reviewer: vaberella Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-24-07 - 07:03 am Title: 9. Bill and Coo

Oh hell no! Oh hell no!. Now I can't blame poor Emma for this. But damn, more drama. All I hope is that 'Ro, is strong enough, NOT to run to this fool (Forge) when shit hits the fan. She's too good for that crap. Especially since again Wolvie was a free Agent.

Now I think they need to hire Madelyne Pryor as a woman teacher, that would be great to have at the school. If only for Scott. Hopefully she'd be faithful to my man. He really does deserve better than that Jean. Can she die yet?! :D

Anyway another great chapter....RoLo sex is always worthwhile to me and the added cliffhangers keep me coming back. Always surprised at an ending of your chapter. Coolies.

VB

Reviewer: vaberella Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-24-07 - 06:53 am Title: 8. Storm in the Blood

Oh hell no, I didn't just read that at the end. Oh man, poor 'Ro, what did she get herself into. Please Wolvie, you adulterous bastard (that I still love), be there to save our 'Ro.

Now as for Wolvie, he needs to pay, but not as much as that damn idiot Jean. Jean was committing a full act of adultery while Wolvie was a free agent. We all know Scott is no friend of his, but Jean is his future wife and Storm will of course be indignant with reason. I wouldn't even waste my breath on her.

Scott, ask for a damn divorce, she's an adulterous wench, undeserving of your affection. After reading that Warren was attached (I'm assuming to Lizzie), and you got Lorna married off to Alex. I'm not a fan of Emma, but she's better than Jean, anyone is. How about bringing in Madelyne Pryor as a new teacher to the school who's invaluable and hook her up with Scott, just anyone but Jean...she's evil.

And this psycho is evil, but it makes the entire story very juicy. Great chappy!

Reviewer: vaberella Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-24-07 - 06:27 am Title: 7. Seven More Days

Loved this chapter, although it was heavy with my two least favorite characters----Yes, you guessed it. Rogue and Jean...evil wenches out for themselves. Can Jean just die now?! I mean, poor Cyclops deserves and needs better. There's Psylocke as a professor who would be a fantastic match for him. Scott really doesn't need that venomous woman. As for Rogue....she's an ungrateful twit. Maybe she'll grow up. But I'm a bit supporter of Kitty/Bobby---if Bobby would grow up and get some balls in this story as he did in the movie. Bobby was uber-coolness, him and Kitty's laid back---hard worker attitude is sizzlin'.

Great chapter..off to the next I am.

Author's Response: I admit I am ambivalent about Rogue. In the movies she's sweet in the ultimate verse I think she's a twit. My Rogue is messed up because I've made Mystique her Anna-Nicole-esque mother. Who, BTW makes an appearance later,

Reviewer: Voli23 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-23-07 - 08:46 pm Title: 9. Bill and Coo

All I can say is....DAMN!!!
This has been getting better and better!!!
I love it!!! :D

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-23-07 - 05:57 pm Title: 9. Bill and Coo

Great chapter!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so please keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.

Reviewer: TinaFab Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-23-07 - 10:02 am Title: 9. Bill and Coo

Whew! wow! I need a ciggy.

I am kinda liking this non evil Emma. She's is non evil right?

Also, Forge! Is he the cigarette smoking man? Or is it someone we don't know about yet?

Please more, I need an update. So many questions, so few updates. LOL!

Author's Response: Yeah. Emma's not a witch in this one. She is simply an ambitious teacher. Never fear, we'll learn the identity of the CSM in a bit. Is it Forge or not? Muwhaaahaaa!

Reviewer: Rolletti Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-23-07 - 02:16 am Title: 9. Bill and Coo

Dang, I had a serious MINDGASM! That was some serious a STUFF going on in the car and across that pie table. (pant, pant, pant) They didn't ease into that relationship, they dove in head first. (get it, get it, HEAD first, ROFLMBO) Ehem...sorry. I'm so worried about what Jean will do when she bring her skanky butt back from her honeymoon. And OMGOSH, evidently there is some history between Ro and Forge. WHAT IS IT? WHO DUMPED WHO? (screaming)

I was so HAPPY to see that you posted. YAY! Now I'm waiting for the next chapter so I can scream about when will you bring the next chapter after that. LOL

Thanks for steamin up my screen.
Rolletti :)

Author's Response: The car sex conversation was a late insert. If just seemed so random to me that they'd come home and start in. So I had Logan prime the pump ...so to speak... on the drive home. It seemed a very RoLo thing to me. Also, I've let them dive right into their relationship sexually because they've actually already been in a relationship mentally, emotionally for two years in my timeline. They know everything about each other. The onyl thing left was the sex. C'mon we RoLo shippers know that Ro and Lo would have incredible sex!

Reviewer: BrightLady Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-23-07 - 12:22 am Title: 9. Bill and Coo

Once again, the sex scene had me blushing. I felt naughty after reading that. So "Mr. Covert" is Forge, huh? Or is he just a red herring? I'm still hoping Remy makes an appearance in this fic.

Thanks for the update and I eagerly await the next installment! :)

Author's Response: Once again, BrightLady ....la la la la la That's all I'm saying. hmmmm...wanders off to plot the next surprise.

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-22-07 - 11:48 pm Title: 9. Bill and Coo

Holy CRAP. That was fantastic!

I just knew there was something positively evil around the corner, and you delivered! I love RoLo stories with Forge as the not-so-noble ex-boyfriend, or whatever, so this is great. The lovemaking made my eyebrows fly off my forehead. Logan's internal monologue was perfect. Please, PLEASE update! To quote Daffy Duck, "Go, Go, GO! Now, NOW, NOW!"

Author's Response: Forge was a given. I laid the foundation in the early chapters for Forge to make an appearance. I have always, always been intrigued by the man who simply left Ororo with no real explanation. I've given him a humdinger of a reason but we won't find out why for a few more chapters. Suffice, he'll look like a fool. Nobody messes with Ro!

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