When I got the alert saying one of my favorite stories was updated I was thrilled but I got sick, had an accident and just didn't get to it despite sending the story to me so I could read it at work, which btw I did today. It's the oddest thing but I was pleasantly surprised at the sheer enjoyment reading this gave me. I don't know why, should've expected that but it was such a nice little thrill. Excuse me for babbling, on with the review.

For some reason this sentence just really made me feel good so I had to include it first:

The sky was shifting to that deep blue that she loved, just as the black clouds mingled with it, turning it into a murky soup. The stars weren’t out yet. The street lamps and stoplights threw prisms of light over her caramel skin. The driver made a sound of approval in his throat.

I really liked that. Your stories are so flat out real; you capture every essence you can to make them utterly realistic. Sometimes I will admit the things in your story can be a little too real but I can’t deny your talent.

I’m not a big fan of Remy and Ororo but I still like what you’ve done with them however, Logan was almost creepy! I actually felt just like Ororo what with the way he was acting, couldn’t wait for him to get her home so he would be on his way. Now that’s real – too real! I want to like the little brawny galoot! But it does make me wonder how you’re going to pull off the RoLo. I must ask you, like with Windy, why aren’t you writing professionally?


Author's Response: The RoLo will be on the fringes in this story. Ororo won't be attracted to him at first. He will have to gain her trust eventually, and they may end up having a grudging friendship. I also intend to give Logan some back story soon. The sky I described I actually saw on the way home one night from Sac from the freeway.

right now i'm as giddy as a kid in a candy store (not use a phrase you just did). I loved this chapter. It was fun and flirty. Fast and furiously lavish! Great Job! I can tell you enjoyed writing it. I loved reading it. Believe me it was a WELCOMED distraction while at work.

Author's Response: hee hee hee! I'm so glad you liked it! Flirty, huh? I'm trying not to let this one get too cold between updates, but it's hard, with my usual case of tapestry syndrome where I have too many stories in progress at the same time. I need to stop that... thanks for the review.

Hon, definitely feels like you have a better 'feel' for where you want to take this story. I noted that you had a lot of good use of metaphors running through this chapter.

After we've seen the development of Remy and Bella's relationship, I have to wonder if part of the attraction he has with Ororo stems from the fact that he has so much control over everything that's happening to her currently. For instance with Bella, she was a fiery talent that constantly twisted and competed with for dominance, but with Ororo's growth, Remy is basically pulling all the strings.

I like seeing Logan slowly but surely making more of a presence in this story. I'm having the belief again, that out of all the players in this story, Logan is going to be the one that's that going to be the most honest with her. He's basically been at each stage of Ororo's development. And since he's an outside player, he has the most objective view on everything. And although he might not be one of the most favorite people right now, I can see that changing soon.

Anyway later lass, keep up the good work!

Author's Response: I'm grinning and glowing over here, friend. Yes, Logan will likely have a good understanding of Ororo, but he will have to get to know her first, and she already has it in mind that he's too poky, nosy and opinionated for her taste, where she's trying to rise above where she's been. Ororo will have issues with Remy, too, and he won't be the only one pulling strings, considering the industry she's standing at the threshold of. Bella will pop up once in a while. The honeymoon period for Ororo is just about over. Thanks for the compliments and suggestions! Glad you liked the metaphors.