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Reviewer: Cee Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-08-09 - 02:32 pm Title: Fears

knew that guy was up to no good.

I'm enjoying this! I normally can't stand original characters in fanfic, or if so, only in low doses, but you've worked them in well.

That, and you brought in a fresh idea with this Mutant League, with someone besides Magneto finding and recruiting them, definitely nice for a change. It makes sense that they would come after Storm.

The dialogue gets better the farther you go along in this, even though it was pretty good to begin with. This is developing nicely. It's nice to see some real plot along with the RoLo action.

Author's Response: Thanks. I really loved this review. The beginnings are always hard to write!

Reviewer: Sweet Pea Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-08-09 - 04:33 am Title: Fears

I'm surprise Logan didn't pick up on anything from Kuhio. At least the girl isn't Ororo's daughter.

Author's Response: LoL. When I first posted this on another site I had a lot of people thinking she was. And Logan doesn't trust him...but Ororo is trying to, so that makes all the difference.

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-07-09 - 04:25 pm Title: Fears

Wow. This sounds very promising! I look forward to your next update!!

Author's Response: Thanks! The next chapter is half way done!

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