I never told you how cute and sweet your story is and even with the mistakes it is one of my favorite stories!!

I haven’t come here in a long time and I hardly ever log in anymore when I review but today’s your lucky day. I remember reading this on fanfiction.net and thinking this story was badly written and giving you constructive criticism which you took like a big baby going off to cry to mommy but I've read through this now and can see you've gotten better. You aren't over describing things now which is a relief but you have a lot of mistakes that a beta could maybe help you with. There’re two things I didn’t like about it and one was that Rory is a weird nickname to me cause there’s a Rory who used to be in Excalibur, a dude, and Logan kept calling her name all the time when real life people don’t do that but that’s being picky. The 2nd thing was Rogue saying Ah see ya’ll later Logan,” which if you decipher it would mean I see you all later, Logan which makes no sense unless she’s illiterate. Some things I didn’t understand at all like what the way you used doughtily which didn’t make any sense in that sentence and what is a grimme? And who says ya twos? So maybe I’m just not worldly enough to know the meanings and that would be on me but other than that the story has improved with each chapter. I know you won’t think this is a nice review but I couldn’t resist telling you what I thought when I found this story again but whatever. Would I recommend this story? Maybe but I wouldn't not recommend it at this point.

Author's Response: Well, hello Nienna. Didn't expect to see you pop up. Still think I was a baby about everything, huh? You seem to still have a little grudge about it too. Well I'm still sorry you see it like that, I just saw it as defending myself, not "running to Mommy" as you put it, but whatever. It's nice that you think I improved, so thank you. And with all my terms you pointed out, they are slang terms that people use often. Maybe you have never herd people talk like that, but I have (and of all walks of life too). So again, thanks for stopping by and reviewing.

Man this is so different like I never would've expected something like this but I like it a lot so keep it up!!!

Author's Response: Nais tuke Nienna. I will diffently try to keep it up for you...wait that didn't sound right.

Sorry but Batman/Wolverine is right. You keep switching back and forth with your tenses and the writing is off as if you typed it up real fast and put it up without going over it so yes you should get a beta or just go over it better next time. And Batman/Wolverine's riht about looking forward to the next chapt cause so am I. Oh and yea I almost forgot but this seem like high school not college.