Penname: MadameVega [Contact] Real name: Victoria
Member Since: 07-11-13
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A love gained by Girlwonder Rated: 18 Liked [Reviews - 11]
Summary: Logan and ro have been together for a little bit and logan leave to tie up loose ends from his past when he returns who else is waiting on him
Categories: General
Characters: None
Genres: Angst
Warnings: Adult language
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 5049 Read Count: 8276
[Report This] Published: 06-19-13 Updated: 08-02-13
Reviewer: MadameVega Signed Liked
Date: 07-11-13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hello. Your story is very interesting and I am curious to see how it goes....a sugestion though if I could.

Watch your capitalization and punctuation. I am not trying to be a grammar Nazi(trust me) but it can make it really hard to read. Simply capitalization fixes like capitalizing everyone's first names in dialog "I'm pregnant, yes Logan is the father." not "Im pregnant yes logan is the father"....If you are a very young author maybe invest in a BETA, someone to proof read your work before you post it.

One author to another you do have talent you should put it to full use. Happy Writing! -Vega