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Reviewer: MaryBrazil Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06-18-14 - 08:11 am Title: chapter 1

To be continued?

Reviewer: danny Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-22-07 - 10:34 pm Title: chapter 1

Damn girl! Keep writing.

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-16-07 - 06:23 pm Title: chapter 1

There's a lot of good stuff crammed into this short little chapter, but we need to fix your formatting to make the dialogue easier to follow. Well written, believable words coming out of their mouths, and again, good use of the length of the piece, since there are no wasted words, but formatting, punctuation and spelling need fixing. But in the meantime, for a first fic from you, I'm pretty darned happy. Keep it coming.

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review. I know! I know! I did a hit n run with these two chapters! I have to put time on the side to rewrite both chapters. I apologize in advance for the sloppy writing. I am happy with the helpful reviews. If you have any advice for chp 3 please let me know. (After I fix chapter 1 and 2 of course). :)

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-16-07 - 02:09 am Title: chapter 1

This is interesting, their bantering certainly but it's one huge unbroken paragraph. You should double space any time someone's talking, break up the huge block so it's easier to read. I don't ususally bother to read much of a story in this format. You also have a few spelling issues, your instead of you're and wispered instead of whispered so I'd advise just re-reading it and doing a spell check. Other than that it's brutally honest and it has potential.

Reviewer: Rolletti Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-15-07 - 04:17 am Title: chapter 1

Well I guess she told him! I like your first fic keep writing sweets,

Rolletti

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review. I hope you also like my second fic.

Reviewer: Voli23 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-14-07 - 06:48 pm Title: chapter 1

Freaking awesome!!!! Yaowza!!!!

Author's Response: Hope you like the next chapt as well :)

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-14-07 - 06:21 pm Title: chapter 1

Great strat!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so please keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.

Author's Response: Hey dragon thanks for the review I will update soon. You guys are great.

Reviewer: orororo Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-14-07 - 10:02 am Title: chapter 1

it's realyy good athena!!!
i just don't like that it's victor, i always hate it when he got ro in any fanfics, but that's just me!
u'r fic is really good!!!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for the review - I must admit I was a little intimidated everyone here has great ideas. Thank you (sorry about victor next story I start we will exclude him.) :)

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