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Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 04-03-07 - 05:56 pm Title: Fly paper

Great chapter!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so please keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.

Reviewer: orlimoon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-12-06 - 09:29 pm Title: Fly paper

Oh man! I love your story it's nice can't wait to see what Logan does?

Reviewer: orlimoon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-12-06 - 09:18 pm Title: Make up-Make over

Oh how coute I like it

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Date: 07-10-06 - 09:48 pm Title: Tears of pain

awesome i wasn't cofused at all I really liked it

Author's Response: I'm glad your enjoying it. Will update a.s.a.p, just need to sort the next chapter out first. Thanks for all your reviews.

Reviewer: Anonymous. Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-09-06 - 06:05 pm Title: Mind control

I'm confused.

Author's Response: The sections of this chapter with Ororo are set in the back of her mind, where she or someone else is creating the perfect dream world, by skipping from one place to the next. The other sections are Hank and Charles, and how they are finding a way to help her. Hope this clears it up for you a bit. The next chapter hopefully wont be so confusing.

Reviewer: windrider1 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-09-06 - 08:53 am Title: Mind control

Ok, I am confused. ??? What exactly is happening? You have potential for an interesting story (definitely not a round robin) but I am lost in translation somewhere. Help.

Author's Response: Ororo's trapped in her own mind, and is jumping from one dream or fantasy to the next, in order to find the one she prefers, so that she'll stay in unconsciousness/coma. Her own doing or another mutant? havent decided yet.

Reviewer: orlimoon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-07-06 - 02:20 pm Title: Dreams and re-enactments

Ah man you are bad! Can't wait for the next chapter

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-07-06 - 10:59 am Title: Dreams and re-enactments

It's not out of control! It's fine. Interesting explanation for why Ororo and Logan act the way they do, and nice transition back to the original theme.

Let's hear a little about what Logan and Amara were fighting about!

Reviewer: Orlimoon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-06-06 - 05:49 pm Title: Swift change of events

ohhh wonder what's going to happen next I love it very good

Reviewer: mercy Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-06-06 - 02:40 pm Title: Swift change of events

was this a dream sequence?

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-06-06 - 12:34 pm Title: Swift change of events

Swift change of events? I'm thinking swift change of plot! (and I'm not saying that in a mean way, I promise) What happened to these being teenagers at a school? Suddenly Ororo's naked and Logan's cussing like a sailor. The chapter itself is good, but it's definitely at odds with the first three (or at least doesn't pick up the same thread). I enjoyed this bit of the story, but I'm curious as to what will come next. I'm very interested to see you write more, Mimz.

Author's Response: Sorry I changed the plot, I wanted them to appear different from other students, that they are older than they actually are-they grew up faster, eg a dog is 2 in human years but 14 in dog years. again i'm very sorry. But Ororo is usually naked when getting in touch with nature and Logan is always swearing.

Reviewer: Sango2 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-06-06 - 12:04 pm Title: No problem!

WOW!, the last chapter was very powerful and passionate. Hope there's more to come. ;)

Reviewer: Mimz Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06-30-06 - 04:38 am Title: What's It to You?

I like this, it's funny, shows the childish side of the girls. Lovin' the Hello Kitty throw pillow

Reviewer: tamazi Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06-30-06 - 01:05 am Title: Give him a Chance

ppl write more! luvin the rejection cee, good way to start it off :D

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06-29-06 - 10:36 pm Title: Give him a Chance

This was cute, I like this addition. That Jean sure is a troublemaker, isn't she? ;-)

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