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Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 03-18-18 - 12:04 am Title: Demons Chasing Me

What happens next?

Reviewer: Esme Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-08-10 - 10:46 am Title: Demons Chasing Me

Please update soon, I am enjoying yhis story and can'tg eait to see what happens next

Reviewer: Nicole Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09-07-09 - 10:05 pm Title: Prologue~ Just Stay

Great start, the formatting is a bit wonky, needs to be spaced out a bit. I loved the beginning, the dream sequences was good, however the ending left something to be desired. It felt rushed and Logan seemed out of character the way he just suddenly agreed to stay. Frankly it felt like Storm was having a conversation with Scott instead of Logan. A little more resistance from Logan, having him battle with leaving more, and thinking on staying would have been more like something Logan would do. But nonetheless it's a great start and I will continue reading it, and giving my feedback

Reviewer: Cee Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 03-21-09 - 05:41 pm Title: Chapter 11: Just Looking for a Good Time

The last line made me grin.

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Date: 12-31-08 - 10:47 pm Title: See You In My Dreams

this is another good chapter i am so glad you update write more soon please

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Date: 12-30-08 - 05:37 am Title: See You In My Dreams

Reviewer: orororo Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12-29-08 - 10:05 pm Title: See You In My Dreams

i love thisss shelle!!!!!!!! please update soon!!!

Author's Response: I'm glad you like. Working on it right now.

Reviewer: Cee Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12-29-08 - 09:14 pm Title: Chapter 9: Whiskey Girl

“I wonder what all that was about.”

That's cute.

Reviewer: Cee Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12-29-08 - 09:13 pm Title: See You In My Dreams

The first paragraph was really long, a lot of ideas crammed into one block of text. it would be easier to read that section if you just added paragraph breaks. Other than that, this is a good transition to your story. We seemed to step into Logan's nightmare without much warning, which is good. Poor guy.

Author's Response: Thanks for the suggestion. I agree with you. I'll try to work on that. I have always wondered how he would handle everyones death and this is how I feel it would happen.

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01-21-08 - 04:03 pm Title: After School Fun

That was awesome! Ororo kidding him about the pink apron was classic, and I love their banter about who beat who at pool. Good choice of a song to use for this chapter, too.

Reviewer: Darlin Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01-20-08 - 11:11 pm Title: Help Me

I had wanted to read the first chapter when you first put this up but the sentences are all squashed together and it makes it a little bit of a nusiance to read. I think it may help if you double space between sentences. I'm not trying to be picky it will just make for an easier story to read. A beta could help you with typos and things like that. Well, after tackling the first two chapters it'll be a bit before I try the third. I like straight forward stories which this is so I am curious what you have planned for the couple but the format of the story may delay me in getting to it.

Reviewer: Rising Goddess1 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01-13-08 - 08:11 am Title: I Love This Bar

soooooo good
please update soon

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01-07-08 - 10:26 pm Title: I Love This Bar

Grate chapter!!!! I look forward to your next update!!


Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Working on it right now but it's a slow process when your working with one arm.

Reviewer: Cee Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 11-23-07 - 01:28 am Title: Lunch Date

I like this story, but I noticed it's been a while since you updated, so I had to go back and reread some of the previous chapters.

This is easy to read, the sentences aren't loaded with too much description or interruptions in thought. Logan seems like a good listener in this story, which is nice, since Ororo is so frequently his sounding board.

Author's Response: I thought it was time to make Logan sit down and listen. I'm glad you enjoy it.

Reviewer: Dragon Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 11-19-07 - 10:02 am Title: Lunch Date

This is a great chapter please continue writing it and post again soon.

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