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Reviewer: QTFic Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 01-23-11 - 12:49 pm Title: Of Hooves and Hearts

Very simply and nicely written.

Reviewer: GhostAuthor Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09-19-09 - 07:42 pm Title: Of Hooves and Hearts

As you said for mine not bad for a first fic.Very Good one in fact ;)

Author's Response: Thanks! I had no clue what to write, so just threw things together hoping it would be ok :p

Reviewer: Cee Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 09-17-09 - 04:05 pm Title: Of Hooves and Hearts

This was actually very cute.

If you use a carriage return for each line of dialogue to separate them, it would help to make it easier to read. The grammar, language and descriptions are otherwise very good. When dialogue is lumped together into a paragraph, it gets lost and just looks like exposition.

Author's Response: Yeah, I just noticed that :p Thanks for the advice though! :)

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