The word is Constructive critism, constructive being the opt word:) I agree that the story had some grammar no-no, but go read my fics, or any other fic here and you will find the same. I personally never get a beta reader, and there are some errors, but it's still readble and enoyable, I hope:) The point is this author is putting his or her work out here, possibly their first fic, and there's no need to scare them off with sarcastic comments, it's not helpful guys. Which just made me think of a new rule here, no 'Flaming'. Why not offer or suggest a beta reader:) I liked the story and it's obvious to me that this is a young new writer. And I'd like to offer to the author my help, I'll be happy to read over your fics and help you out before you post it. Please don't let anyone's comments discourage you from writing, Believe me I used to get flamed alot, not everyone will like what you write or how you write, but what I did was use what others said to write better. Granted it may not always be what you want to hear, but even 'flames' can be helpful:) My email is parisian@spikeluver.com (Or you can just click my name and send me a 'comment'). I meant what I said I'd be happy to beta and help you out:) Pari