okay this sentence inlike the second chapter is SO bad-- pls check your grammar or get a beta reader, cuz alot of youre story seems immature and poorly written ""OK," Storm said as the door to the Blackbird opened and she flew out and everyone watched her as her eyes turned a milky white and a tornado formed and it hit the water right away and a very large crystal came out of the water and Storm controlled the winds to bring her into the Bird and then she became dizzy and fainted and then fell into the water and then Logan saw what happened and then he dove in after her and grabbed her quickly and brought her head above water so she wouldn't drown." RUN ON SENTENCE!!