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Reviewer: digital tempest Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-10-06 - 05:58 am Title: Chapter Two

You've done an excellent job in painting the gritty world they live in, but despite all that, they share something that transcends even that and becomes something beautiful despite the desperation of their situation. Can't wait to read more. :D

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to notice the details. I wasn't sure if I was overbearing in that department or not giving enough. This particular Rolo'ism is so close to my heart. I hope I can do it justice.

Reviewer: windrider1 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-06-06 - 12:13 pm Title: Chapter Two

FLAWLESS VICTORY! Loved it, heck I love any homage to MK.

She loved his shortness, and had made a joke about it. She had teased him saying that he was an attentive lover because it took him less time to get to the goodies. Ahahahaha. Perfect.

I loved this chapter. I really like how they express laughter and happiness with each other in a war ravaged world, because there is no greater expression of love than when despite the circumstances, no matter what they are, you can love and laugh with someone. Update soon, girlie. I'm waiting!!


Author's Response: Lol. Ya'll keep catching all my gaming references. Awsomeness! I love Rolo. Everytime their together they have a special untouchable bond between them. No matter what Marvel writer has control over them, they have all shown it. One day we'll see it in Uncanny or Astonishing. OR ELSE!!! I am really gonna enjoy writting this story, the sequel (Stormfront episodes) and its epiloge (Graduation Day). Rolo are going to go through an emtional wringer before its all over. I hope I can really get into the foundation of their realationship. Wish me luck!

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-06-06 - 06:12 am Title: Chapter Two

Spunk and love juice...back in college, my friends would have called the rag or shirt used to clean that up the "hoochie coochie towel." Brings back memories...

Fun, raw love scene. Not the usual "poetic" RoLo lovin' that it's so easy to get used to, I liked the feel of them stealing time for themselves. This story is a real departure from your other one. I like them both, but I like that it's hard to tell that the same person wrote both of them.

Author's Response: Thanks for the complement. Changing up the tempo from the stories was something that I was trying really hard to do. Thanks for noticing it. As for the love scene...heh. I guess I got used to the movie-esque like stuff. The kind where you can see the fog, hear the music and see the graceful flow of body movements, but uhm I honestly don't know of anyone whose ever really had an experience like that. I couldn't describe something like that even if I was paid too, lol.

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