Your narrative is improving, this read really smoothly, without being too dialogue-intensive (since you mentioned earlier that you feared having too much dialogue and not enough story). This is well-balanced.

I like ororo's mental dialogue with herself, and laughed about the "wake up and smell the men" comment. That was cool.

Author's Response: Glad u liked the comment. Seems to me that my 'angst' mood has taken a back seat (though its still very much there) allowing me to take some comedic liberties.