Jean is a skank and Raul is a no good whore. Isn't he the one that wanted Ororo all to himself, but now expects 'Ro to share him with Jean. What a jerk. I hope 'Ro sleeps with Logan and rubs it in both their faces!!!!!

I like your story. I like the content that you have. The plot and the dialogue, but you have a bit of fundamental grammatical errors that, slightly hinder your work.

Some other of these mistakes I committed when first started writing many, many years ago so its no big deal. First thing, a dot pause. Such as "..." is usually only three dots long anything more is not really needed.

A heal can improve an injury. A heel is a part of the foot.

Some of the other things are just spelling mistakes and or breaking up of your paragraphs to help with organizing your work.

Again, i love your story after this in fact I'll be adding it to my favorites. I just wanted to point out those things I've seen to help out a fellow author.

Please keep writing I look forward to seeing more.