I had wanted to read the first chapter when you first put this up but the sentences are all squashed together and it makes it a little bit of a nusiance to read. I think it may help if you double space between sentences. I'm not trying to be picky it will just make for an easier story to read. A beta could help you with typos and things like that. Well, after tackling the first two chapters it'll be a bit before I try the third. I like straight forward stories which this is so I am curious what you have planned for the couple but the format of the story may delay me in getting to it.

I like that last line, and the one he made about talking to yourself being one of the first signs of losing your mind. Cute!

The dialogue is getting stronger, which is good. I also like how you have a section of exposition for Logan's inner reflections, and then a separate one for Ororo's. It's funny seeing how much she has on her desk!

Author's Response: I just let her borrow mine for a minute. I think all teachers have a messy desk some time or another. Thanks for the good review