"What you need to be thinking about is how we’re going to hook up Ms. Munroe and Logan, ya nasty”

That made me laugh. All right. You updated. Show us how you're gonna hook 'em up!!

And good work on the spell checking. Few goofs with punctuation, but that takes practice, anyway. Good job taking this up a notch.

So I take it that your making both of your OC's are Romani due to the "odd language" they speak. A little bad grammer usage "Gypsy says in a only slightly sarcastic tone" shouls be "Gypsy says in an only slightly sarcastic tone" or "Gypsy says in a slightly sarcastic tone" I can see the mini me asspect in the story.....similairities between Storm and gypsy. Mating ceremony...sounds very interesting almost romantizied Romani. Good imagination and creativity. Keep it up. Though stilll choppy.

Author's Response: who's romani or what's romani? i don't mean to sound stupid or anything but i don't know who or what that is. I was up late so please do try to forgive the bad grammer plus i tend change my accent when i speek.

assumtions are made her in the opening few moments.....how did she know Chuck was a telepath? By her word usage she is slightly ignorant and though she is of the streets she's not worldly. Very anime of you though when you introduced "tramp".
The man-wolf description reminded me of the whole parallel evolution theroy Black Panther told Logan about in Woverine. As for the gypsy decription.....thats a romantizied version of a Romani....believe me. Over all its getting better.

Hmmmmmmm. I don't know what the spraypainted image should be. What would be shocking enough to tick off Jean, I wonder? And that would make Ororo and Logan laugh? There's something to ponder...

Your chapter titles are definitely getting better. I laughed at the last one. I'm still grinning from two chapters ago with "Hot Topic, b***h!" And Hello Kitty accessories always get a thumbs up from me...

Not sure why the % signs showed up where you might have meant to use bold tags?

Author's Response: no i ment to put the percent signs. I like them better than the other ones. ^_^

I'm sort of confused about Gypsy and Tramp. Are we going to get some background soon on them?

Author's Response: i'll put it in the next chapter. promise. did you like this chap thou? Any suggestions?

The chapter title puzzled me; I was half-expecting some similarities between Ororo and Gypsy in this, and instead it had them kind of goodnaturedly bickering with each other (which isn't a bad thing). Tramp's reaction to Gypsy's nicknaming was funny!

It would be nice to eventually see more of the team's reactions to their two new additions. That, and some of Logan's reactions to them, too, since Tramp is kinda feral, and it seems like their would be a "pack rivalry" between them, living in the same house. The brief bits of dialogue between each set of characters in the previous two chapters were great when Charles was calling all of them together.

Keep it coming. A short update isn't a bad thing when you stop at a point where you feel it's reasonable, and you say what you have to say. Glad you've had time to write!

This reminds me a bit of Ultimate X-Men with the pace of the dialogue. Kitty and Jubes are funny in this. I also like Ali's exchange with Kurt. I'd like to see what Ororo and Gypsy have to say to each other as this story moves on, since their personalities complement each other. Ororo is calm, Gypsy's outspoken. Should be fun!