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Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 08-19-07 - 03:57 am Title: It wasn't me

Hmmmmmmm. I don't know what the spraypainted image should be. What would be shocking enough to tick off Jean, I wonder? And that would make Ororo and Logan laugh? There's something to ponder...

Your chapter titles are definitely getting better. I laughed at the last one. I'm still grinning from two chapters ago with "Hot Topic, b***h!" And Hello Kitty accessories always get a thumbs up from me...

Not sure why the % signs showed up where you might have meant to use bold tags?

Author's Response: no i ment to put the percent signs. I like them better than the other ones. ^_^

Reviewer: irish_sunset Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 08-19-07 - 03:56 am Title: It wasn't me

I don't know what the spray painted image should be, but I do have a couple of suggestions. Take time to proof read, and you didn't have to tell us that you meant to spell trouble incorrectly. I personally don't think it's good to interrupt the story unless, it serves a purpose as part of the story. I would like to see more physical descriptions because I forget what Gypsy and Tramp look like. Maybe questions you should ask yourself, how are Gypsy and Tramp evolving into a Rolo story? Maybe you have it mapped out and that's good. Continue with your work, and I shall continue to read.

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