The heading where it says 3rd person could almost say "Present day," or at least reference some timeframe where they are old enough to be in a relationship. You don't have to tell us the tense, since we see it change there. Which is fine, since the time period changed.

I'm chuckling here about Cleo's description of her grandmother. Sounds eerily like my own grandmother, minus the smoking, and somewhat less blatant homophobia.

Write on, dear fri. Write on.