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Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06-10-07 - 10:18 pm Title: Gypsy's All

The end wasn't dull. This was actually a nicely paced chapter, Fry. I like the stuff that each Xman occupied themselves with before the Professor called all of them to action. Nice, easy little scenes that were easy to picture, and they made me smile.

Mating ceremony? Neat.

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06-06-07 - 12:09 am Title: Who let the Tramp out?

Tramp is an interesting character; interesting how he seems kind of feral and wolflike, like Sabertooth, and that Gypsy seems to have a trusting relationship with him (or does she?). I can't wait to see what kind of back story you write for how Gypsy came to be in the hands of Sabertooth, and who's payroll he is on, too.

Reviewer: OroroHowlett Signed [Report This]
Date: 06-03-07 - 08:15 pm Title: I'm locked up but they let me out

Ushould break this up some i think and the spelling isn't great but it has potential. For Sabertooth when he called her puppet did u mean 2 have Sabertooth saying poppet like inPotC?

Author's Response: oh he says poppet, Really? i'll fix it. i love potc and thought it would be nice to have Gypsy beat the crap out of Sabertooth and when giving the final blow say im not your poppet you ugly bastard or something along those lines.

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06-03-07 - 06:27 pm Title: I'm locked up but they let me out

Big risk, making the character a teen and having a rape scene right off the bat, but I want to see what happens when she goes with Xavier and Jean, especially if her abuse is a frequent thing. How will that affect her attitude toward her peers, I wonder? Sabertooth is calling her a puppet? Sounds scary!

I will quit philosophizing; keep updating. This is the beginning of what I know will be an intriguing story. Also, tweak your spelling of "desert," to only have one 's'. TTYL. Cee

Author's Response: the puppet thing is actually from me watching to much pirates of the carribean. It will take her time to ugust to evereone exsept Ororo and Logan wich after she meets them will lead to Ro/Lo. can't spell well and am to lazy to hit spell check button on keyboard.puppet means a girl child that you hold dear to your heart.wich in Sabertooths case means that you enjoy tortuing her.

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