I'll admit this story had a potential. But there is so much going on with the writing style that its hard to weed your way through it even if you did give a guide at the beginning on how to read it. Maybe you should take this down and revise a bit and then put it back up! The story is great but the structure could use a little work.

Author's Response: Thanks for the comment. I KNOW the structure is craaazzzzy but it has been written over the past three years...so in order to just finish it I've started with a proper frame in the rest of the chapters and continued from there. Its difficult in the beginning but it gets better (hopefully)