I'll admit this story had a potential. But there is so much going on with the writing style that its hard to weed your way through it even if you did give a guide at the beginning on how to read it. Maybe you should take this down and revise a bit and then put it back up! The story is great but the structure could use a little work.

Author's Response: Thanks for the comment. I KNOW the structure is craaazzzzy but it has been written over the past three years...so in order to just finish it I've started with a proper frame in the rest of the chapters and continued from there. Its difficult in the beginning but it gets better (hopefully)

You have some complex issues and subject matter in this story. Very good stuff. Please continue soon!