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Reviewer: Digital Tempest Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-02-06 - 10:38 pm Title: Number One Crush

This can't be all there is! The first thing that caught my eye was the title because I happened to be listening to the Romeo and Juliet soundtrack and what was on? What else? One Inch Punch's "Pretty Piece of Flesh." Very nicely done. I've seen a lot of pairings in my day, but I think this is the first time (assuming here) I've read a story that even hinted at an Apocalyse/Ororo pairing. How I do love odd pairings. ;) I do hope you continue. I would love to see an update because I am very intrigued.

Reviewer: Kathy Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 07-01-06 - 08:08 pm Title: Number One Crush

uh oh Logan is on the prowl...and not in a good way

Reviewer: windrider1 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06-30-06 - 11:18 pm Title: Number One Crush

ps. Love you. Consider your soul safe...for now.

Reviewer: windrider1 Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06-30-06 - 11:17 pm Title: Number One Crush

**rubs hands together ala Mr. Burns** Excellent, Smithers, Excellent.

Reviewer: OriginalCeenote Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06-30-06 - 09:50 pm Title: Number One Crush

Intense, for something so short. Still doesn't mean I've stopped waiting for my Scabbed Wings fix, though. You still have to add on to that. But this was good.

As for a beta read, "threatening" needs a quick fix of that typo, and the period needs to be moved inside the quote on this line, "Know that you're mine". A comma before "betrayal" where you have "and later betrayal" would be good, too, for emphasis: "...and later, betrayal."

Wish you could write more often. I enjoy your stuff.

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